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PhilomenaAquitaine
 Post subject: The Time Passed
PostPosted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 10:10 pm 
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Location: Looking pretty behind the bar at Holme's Tavern
You stood in silence, immobile as marble
As I scattered the red petals of my love around you.
Nervously I fluttered, aware the more I drew close
The further away you stood, discomfited by adoration.
I could not hide the ticking of my open heart,
You could not hide your disdain.
The spell passed, my passion cooled by reticence
And your caged heart ceased to fascinate.
But when another loved me, warming with hot kisses
You missed the heat of my skin on your sheets.
It was your turn to scatter petals in vain,
And sing your tired love songs to my heart
But your petals went untouched and song unheard,
Because my soul had found its mate.

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 Post subject: Re: The Time Passed
PostPosted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 11:59 pm 
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Like a painting in words, that was very seductive, and sensual, yet isolating somehow, and painful in other ways.

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 Post subject: Re: The Time Passed
PostPosted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 9:34 pm 
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I love that it is really beautiful. I love the imagery of the petals, they really work as a metaphor for the fragile beauty of love.
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PhilomenaAquitaine
 Post subject: Re: The Time Passed
PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 11:42 am 
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Thank you both. My husband's response to this poem was 'The last line is about me, isn't it?' and trying to guess which ex the rest of the poem is about. :lol:

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Really lovely !
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PostPosted: Tue Sep 13, 2011 7:36 pm 
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Really like this

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PhilomenaAquitaine
 Post subject: Re: The Time Passed
PostPosted: Tue Sep 13, 2011 8:00 pm 
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Thanks ladies, I think it is a situation most people can relate to. Even beautiful mermaids can suffer the pain of unrequited love!

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Beautiful words from a beautiful character! I see you've hit 900 posts! You should get an award of some kind! Hope Urat has given you a pay rise sugar!:D
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Thanks Vamp! Urat doesn't pay me though, I help him from the kindness of my heart. 900 posts! I am in Grimney far too much!

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