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Iceman
 Post subject: Summer.
PostPosted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 12:45 pm 
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The scented air of summers breath, the warming summer sun

The fading call from Nightingale says Spring is on the run



The cattle graze at snails pace the sheep are being shorn

The cat has found the perfect place lay flat-out on the lawn



The background air is filled with noise, a tune the insects play

The crickets dance the loudest song as they go on their way



The shimmer of the warming fields play tricks upon the eyes

The land it seems to dance and leap towards the very skies



The summer yields her grace and beauty bringing us this day

The lazy brook now slowly warms, as trout in shadows stay



The fields of corn bring colours bright, the insects sweetest potion

The ripening oats and Barley sway like waves on deepest ocean



The summer show the best on earth no tickets here to buy

The limit just your senses and a clear blue open sky

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WaylandCybersmith
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
PostPosted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 12:51 pm 
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Wonderful, Iceman. Truly wonderful.

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Gothicka
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
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Great stuff Iceman glad you are back and writing again.
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Iceman
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
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Thanks you guys, my work is "chocolate boxy" but at the moment it suits where I am. ;)

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Nothing wrong with chocolate box, who doesn't like chocolate.

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Iceman
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
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Plenty of critics... so it seems, but what the hell I am happy doing what I am doing. It's not all about fame and fortune.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 10:35 pm 
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Modern critics think it is a crime to make a rhyme. Poor old Kipling, Housman, Yeats, Iceman, Blake, Arnold, etc., etc., etc.

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Iceman
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
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Redvilst your list is of the hallowed members of poetry's elite, hardly the same place you would find the ramblings of a rank amateur like me and the poor use of Her Majesty's English, but I do get your point, rhyme does seem to be a crime. Shame. :cry:

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WaylandCybersmith
 Post subject: Re: Summer.
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Iceman, it isn't the rhyme, nor the meter, nor the verse. It isn't the words, or the eloquence.

The important thing about poetry is the heart.

I would prefer to read a thousand poems that are torn from the soul of a poet, than one which is a mere exercise in words.

No insult to you, Glosnik. I'm still trying to work out one of those backwards-forwards things.

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WaylandCybersmith wrote:
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The important thing about poetry is the heart.
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Bravo!

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