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Iceman
 Post subject: The Mask.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 2:07 am 
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Would I be that person you know,
If my face was not a made one?
Would you acknowledge that face?
If it was not to your liking?

Do I have to put a face on for you?
Or is it just to answer my own anxiety?
You smile but you don't say
You stay but you don't answer.

Is it I that you admire?
Or that which man has made?
If you want me changed
Then why did you want ME?.

The scars of change run deeper than your skin,
They stay with you as sure as rivers run,
Yet they are mine to bear.
Mine alone to bear.

As I walk through each chapter of life that i am given,
I find my mask takes more precious moments,
Takes my life... yet I am still me underneath.
Who wants to see the real me?.

I do.... Goodness me... I do..

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Meadow
 Post subject: Re: The Mask.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 6:00 pm 
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It IS you that I admire Iceman! This is fantastic!

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RobertDevlin
 Post subject: Re: The Mask.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 8:04 pm 
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You have changed your style Sir. Very profound and thoughtful I thought. Flowed so well. Thank you for the read.


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Iceman
 Post subject: Re: The Mask.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 9:00 pm 
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Thanks both, I have indeed changed my style here and used a deeper train of thought to bring this to the surface, it is much tougher writing exactly what you mean, but you can be more open without the burden of rhyme. Both formats of poetry have their merits and i enjoyed putting pen to paper with this, so to speak. :)

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Gwenllian
 Post subject: Re: The Mask.
PostPosted: Sat Feb 11, 2012 12:34 am 
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chimes with me Iceman I've worn a mask most of my life, and even I barely know who I am anymore :(
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Iceman
 Post subject: Re: The Mask.
PostPosted: Sat Feb 11, 2012 1:04 am 
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Gwenllian, by merely recognising that mask you break the chains that have burdened you. I enjoy the journey that see's new light on old window's. You are strong. You will win..x

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