Maybe it's not the last line that is missing but one earlier in the verse?
Quote:
all that you touch is gold dressed as brass
Seems like a good last line to me
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| Author: | Andie99uk [ Wed Sep 14, 2011 2:55 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Unfinished and its killing me! |
I am at a loss with this piece that I have been working on for a few weeks, but have hit a brick wall for the last line. Am wondering if it might be better to scrap the whole last verse? Any how, here is (for what its worth) THE EX FRACTAL Its that time again in TV land when karaoke is thrust onto the stage A pair of jokers cracking their smiles and a panel of experts, proffering their best Your not the best, but you’re getting there Dont think that you’ve already made it There’s always room for compromise HA! that really brings you down to size You look like your doin’ alright away from home almost every night Trying to succeed where others have failed Its the heavens your looking at, but watch your step Giving it your all, is all you know how if punk were new, you’d be Malcolm M Pulling in the punters with mirrors and smoke selling snake oil to indians and music to mugs You claim its not money, but talent you seek With a word to the wise and a nod to the past all that you touch is gold dressed as brass |
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| Author: | Witch [ Wed Sep 14, 2011 8:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Unfinished and its killing me! |
Please try to finish this, don't scrap the last verse, words will eventually come. |
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| Author: | Tanza [ Thu Sep 15, 2011 1:15 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Unfinished and its killing me! |
Yes, do finish it. It'll probably come to you in a split second while you're least expecting it. I'd want to finish it by saying something about them being famous while it's all going on, but fading away if they really haven't got what it takes. It really is a wonder how we all sit watching these people...like we know them. I haven't a clue what their names are even a few short weeks after the final. I know...I'm getting old, but...still. It seems to be better if you don't actually win...no pressure etc. Who was the first ever winner of the X Factor?..and where are they now? ... Can anyone tell me without Googling? |
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| Author: | WaylandCybersmith [ Thu Sep 15, 2011 1:29 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Unfinished and its killing me! |
Yes, keep going. By the way, I am a Lexx fan as well! |
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| Author: | Nydas [ Mon Sep 19, 2011 8:58 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Unfinished and its killing me! |
Maybe it's not the last line that is missing but one earlier in the verse? Quote: all that you touch is gold dressed as brass Seems like a good last line to me
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| Author: | HogstanceBilgecrack [ Sat Oct 29, 2011 12:50 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Unfinished and its killing me! |
Tanza, It was Steve Brookstein, an averagely talented, white, pub circuit soul singer. I know because I was there. Why was I there? My lovely late wife was a production accountant on the show so I had a free ticket. I was cheering for G4, not because I liked them but because they weren't Steve Brookstein. Where is he now...I'm assuming he's back on the pub circuit where he belongs. I used to watch it regularly when she worked on the show...mainly so I could cheer when I saw her name in the end credits. When she switched departments, the show was filed under "S" for... I would argue that it was "good telly" when it first came out. Nowoadays, I would argue that it's a sad indictment of today's cult (yes, I said CULT) of celebrity obsessed society. Awful. |
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