I love that it is really beautiful. I love the imagery of the petals, they really work as a metaphor for the fragile beauty of love.
Many thanks
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| Author: | PhilomenaAquitaine [ Wed Sep 07, 2011 10:10 pm ] |
| Post subject: | The Time Passed |
You stood in silence, immobile as marble As I scattered the red petals of my love around you. Nervously I fluttered, aware the more I drew close The further away you stood, discomfited by adoration. I could not hide the ticking of my open heart, You could not hide your disdain. The spell passed, my passion cooled by reticence And your caged heart ceased to fascinate. But when another loved me, warming with hot kisses You missed the heat of my skin on your sheets. It was your turn to scatter petals in vain, And sing your tired love songs to my heart But your petals went untouched and song unheard, Because my soul had found its mate. |
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| Author: | VorsiniTreylain [ Wed Sep 07, 2011 11:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Like a painting in words, that was very seductive, and sensual, yet isolating somehow, and painful in other ways. |
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| Author: | Nydas [ Thu Sep 08, 2011 9:34 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
I love that it is really beautiful. I love the imagery of the petals, they really work as a metaphor for the fragile beauty of love. Many thanks
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| Author: | PhilomenaAquitaine [ Fri Sep 09, 2011 11:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Thank you both. My husband's response to this poem was 'The last line is about me, isn't it?' and trying to guess which ex the rest of the poem is about. 
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| Author: | Gwenllian [ Sat Sep 10, 2011 4:40 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Really lovely ! |
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| Author: | Witch [ Tue Sep 13, 2011 7:36 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Really like this |
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| Author: | PhilomenaAquitaine [ Tue Sep 13, 2011 8:00 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Thanks ladies, I think it is a situation most people can relate to. Even beautiful mermaids can suffer the pain of unrequited love! |
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| Author: | TheVamp [ Sat Sep 17, 2011 3:21 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Beautiful words from a beautiful character! I see you've hit 900 posts! You should get an award of some kind! Hope Urat has given you a pay rise sugar!:D |
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| Author: | PhilomenaAquitaine [ Sat Sep 17, 2011 8:59 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Time Passed |
Thanks Vamp! Urat doesn't pay me though, I help him from the kindness of my heart. 900 posts! I am in Grimney far too much! |
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