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unwornpoet
 Post subject: A Thousand White Horses
PostPosted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 7:36 pm 
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A thousand white horses ride the basalt
Plain. Showers of quartz spindrift in their wake.
Imbibed; a feral gallop, the bitter salt
Renews my palate and so, I forsake
My spirit to earth, moon and sun. Nether
They perform, from fathoms deep with untucked
Hands, to reach a starless curtain. Untether
The unshod rogue and wait for him to buck.
Only then, will he carry me to shore.
He tries to take my breath, use-up my luck.
A salty liquor in settlement for
My pleasure. The sweetest rain will wash away
The tears I shed. Life invigorated,
I rise up to ride, again and again…
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TheVamp
PostPosted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 4:46 am 
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You write in a really stunning visual way. Great prose. :)
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 5:51 am 
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:D Thanks . Someone else said I write visually :)
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Redvilst
PostPosted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 8:01 am 
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unwornpoet wrote:
.... Someone else said I write visually :)


My word for it would be "viscerally" ... more feel to it than vision. Then again you have the knack of turning feeling into vision. Trez sexy poem whichever way you feel/look at it.

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unwornpoet
PostPosted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 1:28 pm 
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Redvilst wrote:
unwornpoet wrote:
.... Someone else said I write visually :)


My word for it would be "viscerally" ... more feel to it than vision. Then again you have the knack of turning feeling into vision. Trez sexy poem whichever way you feel/look at it.


I enjoy your little critiques, Redvilst :lol: Very flattering. I am definitely one who feels, very true.
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Nydas
PostPosted: Sat Jul 30, 2011 1:22 pm 
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Showers of quartz spindrift in their wake.


Particularly loved that line! Really good!
Great stuff
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