You write in a really stunning visual way. Great prose.
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| Author: | unwornpoet [ Sun Jul 24, 2011 7:36 pm ] |
| Post subject: | A Thousand White Horses |
A thousand white horses ride the basalt Plain. Showers of quartz spindrift in their wake. Imbibed; a feral gallop, the bitter salt Renews my palate and so, I forsake My spirit to earth, moon and sun. Nether They perform, from fathoms deep with untucked Hands, to reach a starless curtain. Untether The unshod rogue and wait for him to buck. Only then, will he carry me to shore. He tries to take my breath, use-up my luck. A salty liquor in settlement for My pleasure. The sweetest rain will wash away The tears I shed. Life invigorated, I rise up to ride, again and again… |
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| Author: | TheVamp [ Mon Jul 25, 2011 4:46 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: A Thousand White Horses |
You write in a really stunning visual way. Great prose.
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| Author: | unwornpoet [ Mon Jul 25, 2011 5:51 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: A Thousand White Horses |
 Thanks . Someone else said I write visually
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| Author: | Redvilst [ Mon Jul 25, 2011 8:01 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: A Thousand White Horses |
unwornpoet wrote: .... Someone else said I write visually My word for it would be "viscerally" ... more feel to it than vision. Then again you have the knack of turning feeling into vision. Trez sexy poem whichever way you feel/look at it. |
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| Author: | unwornpoet [ Mon Jul 25, 2011 1:28 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: A Thousand White Horses |
Redvilst wrote: unwornpoet wrote: .... Someone else said I write visually My word for it would be "viscerally" ... more feel to it than vision. Then again you have the knack of turning feeling into vision. Trez sexy poem whichever way you feel/look at it. I enjoy your little critiques, Redvilst  Very flattering. I am definitely one who feels, very true.
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| Author: | Nydas [ Sat Jul 30, 2011 1:22 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: A Thousand White Horses |
Quote: Showers of quartz spindrift in their wake. Particularly loved that line! Really good! Great stuff 
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