so sad
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| Author: | evenaive [ Thu Jul 14, 2011 12:19 am ] |
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Thirteen A boy wants His Father Needs. Maybe. I'm not rejected, Just left. An unfortunate Umbrella. While the deified Sowed and reaped. He's not dead. Just gone, As I mourn At his bedside. Lie down to bathe in Grief. Then rise Leaving black Lilies On his pillow. |
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| Author: | Gwenllian [ Thu Jul 14, 2011 12:41 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
so sad
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| Author: | evenaive [ Thu Jul 14, 2011 3:04 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
Yes it is very sad but life is a mosaic of sadness and happiness, and I like to use all the bits of broken glass... I hope I don't make you sad with it though. *hugs* |
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| Author: | KaraJarina [ Thu Jul 14, 2011 3:12 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
Simple, poignant, and beautifully sad. Thanks eve. 
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| Author: | evenaive [ Fri Jul 15, 2011 2:19 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
Thank you Karajarina. I'll share a little. My son went to live with his father when he was 13. I'm not very good at expressing how I feel about it - but poetry helps. *hugs* |
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| Author: | Witch [ Fri Jul 15, 2011 9:55 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
So very sad. |
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| Author: | incontinent [ Sat Jul 16, 2011 12:21 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
A powerful heartfelt poem. I like the way you have used the images such as 'An unfortunate Umbrella' - 'the deified' and structured your words. Thank you |
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| Author: | Redvilst [ Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
Brilliant. evenaive wrote: .... My son went to live with his father when he was 13 .... *hugs* I believe a boy who goes through those years without a father spends the rest of his life looking for one ... so maybe for the best. He'll come back. |
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| Author: | Nydas [ Sun Jul 24, 2011 7:55 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
This is a beautiful poem, so poignant, thanks for sharing Eve (hugs)x |
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| Author: | TheVamp [ Mon Jul 25, 2011 4:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: 13 |
I'm touched by that. Thanks for sharing. x |
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